Update to A Very Convenient Truthiness

I've been plugging away at a rewrite to the Very Convenient Truthiness screenplay after getting very helpful guidance from the script readers at Trigger Street Labs.   The rewrite will be completed by mid March.

Key tips from the script readers:

Show rather than tell.  Don't talk about something show it:  Instead of Ivar referring back Sophia crushing Chuck, I added a flashback showing the event.  

Use active voice present tense for action directions.

Do:   He grabbed the bat and attacked the 6 foot vampire zombie mosquito.
Don't:  He grabbed the bat while he was attacking the 6 foot vampire zombie mosquito.

I also added a romantic flashback into the script at the Split Rock Lighthouse on Lake Superior.  The beach has a large number of flat basalt rocks perfect for stacking. Since the the rocks are produced by volcanic action and the movie includes a volcano it made a good tie in.

http://themanyadventuresofjerryandben.blogspot.com/2011/06/grand-day-out.html