Key tips from the script readers:
Show rather than tell. Don't talk about something show it: Instead of Ivar referring back Sophia crushing Chuck, I added a flashback showing the event.
Use active voice present tense for action directions.
Do: He grabbed the bat and attacked the 6 foot vampire zombie mosquito.
Don't: He grabbed the bat while he was attacking the 6 foot vampire zombie mosquito.
I also added a romantic flashback into the script at the Split Rock Lighthouse on Lake Superior. The beach has a large number of flat basalt rocks perfect for stacking. Since the the rocks are produced by volcanic action and the movie includes a volcano it made a good tie in.
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